Kimiko, the Unfortunate Holstaurus

A Fanfic about a Holstaurus horrible past

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Kimiko, the Unfortunate Holstaurus

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Alright guys, I got bored during a day when I couldn't sleep, so I decided to write this Fanfic. I wrote alot of Emotion to it so I at least want to hear your thoughts if I wrote this well.

This was also grammar checked by Pierce so I thank him for it
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"Humans are the very reason our existence is relevant. Without them, gods have no meaning. We have no right to tell them what's right and wrong, for only they're their own masters..."

Quoted by an idealistic fool
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A very emotional one shot, i enjoyed reading it, the beginning was very sad, i felt the emotion from the MC as she went through her tragedy. It brings a tear to peoples eyes, a very waffy ending and fitting on how her life turned out and she was finally able to find happiness.
We won't, surrender, nor will we bow down.

We refuse to follow your lead, and accept your orders.

Nor will we obey your rules, and do things your way.

We we will fight for our cause, and die for it with no regrets.

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Post by PAZ »

A mistake spotted.

"“If you think that felt good, wait until I do this…” I said, seeing my mom do this technique, as I pump my breasts up and down, I use my tongue and lick the ti[ of his exposed penis every time I pump my breasts down."

Tip lol

Also it is a good story that I like it.
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Thanks man. I always make mistakes writing these since I write too fast sometimes
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That is a very good story. I'm going to save it and read from time to time. And this is to the Order I will right this wrong you have committed Justice will be done. (Message from Jedi Knight Revan to The Order. P.S. I'll bring my friend Malak and the entire Republic Fleet).

Anyway great story hope to see more.
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I love the story. It's very emotional and has very good detail! I hope to see more great stories from you!
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