Succubus Nation - Part 34
A mote of man drifting through the Kingdom of Heaven and Hell.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 14
Yo, new part.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 15 to 19
Yay, I finally update again! This time with a New Side Story Section! Huzzah!
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 15 to 19
Finally caught up, lots of fascinating stuff and the history in the side story was a nice change of pace. Curious though where the stuff with the alraune will go, since it is shaping up to appear as if she wants to keep him as a mate. Its still a shame you don't get more feedback, I still think uploading to literotica would get you more comments if you want them.
One bit of contradiction you may want to take care of though, in "Daggersford Ambush" Brack says he has seen one of each regarding elves and dwarves, yet in the side story Brack says he has only heard of people trading with dwarves, never seen them, and was until Lilis' story unsure if elves existed.
One bit of contradiction you may want to take care of though, in "Daggersford Ambush" Brack says he has seen one of each regarding elves and dwarves, yet in the side story Brack says he has only heard of people trading with dwarves, never seen them, and was until Lilis' story unsure if elves existed.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 15 to 19
I see. Thanks for clarifying that.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 20 and 21
Two new parts and a side story are now up.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 23
I have a new part up.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 24
I gotta say, I get that our lead is curious and rather accepting of becoming prey at times, but why did he not seem to even briefly consider just staying inside the inn?
The modern day side story was interesting, especially given it had a romance angle or at least seemed to. Would be neat to see a continuation that explained how succubi in this setting go about having a servant that they love in terms of wanting as a partner. Obviously you are not going for strict monogamy.
The modern day side story was interesting, especially given it had a romance angle or at least seemed to. Would be neat to see a continuation that explained how succubi in this setting go about having a servant that they love in terms of wanting as a partner. Obviously you are not going for strict monogamy.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 25
New part out, woot.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 25
Great work as usual.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 25
Oh neato! I'm really getting into this series considering how long I lurked through each part!
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 26 and 27
New parts, get your new parts here!
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Parts 26 and 27
All of my yes! Thank you, I've been meaning for a reason to lurk some more. I think I'm so caught in the story that I might re-read it again just to anticipate the next part!
Consider me a fan for life of Succubus Nation, you really nailed it with this one.
Consider me a fan for life of Succubus Nation, you really nailed it with this one.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Side Story 3
New Side Story available for your viewing pleasure.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 28
A new part is up.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 28
Color me intrigued at the introduction of what seem to be your story's equivalent of KC's lilim.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 28
I'm amazed your not getting more reviews or comments. I gotta say though, I'm liking what I'm seeing. Keep up the good work!
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 28
Indeed, she is a 'Greater Demon', more powerful than your typical Succubus. Her Keep also has much greater concentrations of passive charm, as you no doubt saw, but it is not as strong as it could be, because Brack isn't a super strong-willed man. Maybe a bit more than normal, but not some Iron-Willed paladin; if a Succubus wants him, he stands no chance.Perentie wrote:Color me intrigued at the introduction of what seem to be your story's equivalent of KC's lilim.
So him resisting as well as he did isn't totally unreasonable. It's just very, very uncomfortable.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 28
Well certainly, even KC's lilim still have to make an effort (small as an effort as it may be) to tempt a man into sex with them (otherwise the man is still consumed by lust like Brack but not in a state where he's going to try to rush her or anything), they just don't have to use any force.SIERRA-116 wrote:So him resisting as well as he did isn't totally unreasonable. It's just very, very uncomfortable.
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 29
Well, you're about to see how much effect such a noble succubus can have on a man. A new part is up.
To find him, you must forget the stories...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
Forget the legends...
You have to do more than walk in his footsteps...
For he is more than the sum of his actions...
I tell you this, not because I trust you...
But because all our lives are at stake...
Because the seeds of our future... are sown in his past...
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Re: Succubus Nation - Part 29
Suitably overpowering. It does seem like Brack has been drained more times and more fully than he's had time to recuperate though. Am I missing references to the means by which he is getting back enough energy to provide a decent meal so soon? It seems like he hasn't had more than a few hours of rest since he got to that realm, though I may be forgetting just what the rules are in your setting for how quickly a human can recover from a succubus feeding.