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Monster Isle - (Ch. 21 part 2)

Posted: Mon Jan 16, 2012 7:50 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Warning - This story contains sexually explicit content.

This will always remain my favorite and most heartfelt story. I plan to eventually edit it thoroughly when it is finished and submit it to an online publishing company. Until then, please enjoy this coming of age tale about a young man who was destined for something more.

Also, my apologies for the poor structuring in the first few chapters. I fully intend to fix that so it doesn't look like a wall of text.

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(Description)

Alex Ispen, the young man with little life to speak of, encounters a strange being in the middle of the night on the streets of his hometown. After the startling encounter, he rushes home and falls asleep. After dismissing the meeting as a dream, Alex checks his e-mail to find a strange message offering him the trip of a lifetime of a cruise ship. He accepts the offer and finds himself having the time of his life on the open sea. That is until a storm brews and sends Alex out to sea with only his luck to keep him alive.

He wakes up on the sandy shores of an island and is greeted by Anderson, a strange gentleman in a tattered lab-coat. He welcomes Alex to the island and piques his curiosity by mentioning "monsters" on the isle. When Alex is left alone to his own devices, he decides to venture into the isle in search of water.

Alex will make many friends, have many adventures, learn about love, and eventually become a man. This is the story of Alex Ispen, and his adventures on Monster Isle.
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There appears to be a limit on the amount of text allowed in a post. Because of this, I have posted links to each individual chapter. The links lead to my workspace and are perfectly safe.

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Chapter 1 - "To he who is worthy"
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%201

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Chapter 2 - Welcome to Monster Isle
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%202

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Chapter 3 - Hopelessly Addicted to Alraune
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%203

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Chapter 4 - The Friendly Fairy and the Ferocious Orc
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%204

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Chapter 5 - The Truth About Elves
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%205

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Chapter 6 - Artificial Love?
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%206

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Chapter 7 - Don't Call me Master
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%207

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Chapter 8 - A Foe Awakened
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%208

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Chapter 9 - Alex's Reward
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... hapter%209

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Chapter 10 - Meru's Magic and Manisha's Weakness
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2010

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Chapter 11 - Agari's Strength
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2011

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Chapter 12 - Kizamu's Agility
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2012

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Chapter 13 - The Forest Rivalry
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2013

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Chapter 14 - The Final Test
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2014

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Chapter 15 - Face Your Fear, Trust Your Heart
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2015

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Chapter 16 - Confidence, Rage, and Sorrow
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2016

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Chapter 17 - Painful Battle
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2017

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Chapter 18 - Comeuppance
http://heliosleinheart.pbworks.com/w/pa ... apter%2018

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Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2012 1:29 am
by Silly587
Oh. Ok, then. Looking forward to it.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2012 5:18 am
by Helios Leinheart
All fixed up. Looks like there's a limit put on the amount of text in a single post. Just use the links. They lead to my workspace.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2012 10:45 am
by Tsar CUBE
Helios, I managed to fill a post with a wall of text, I think the problem is that the colour tags or the normal tags from MGU don't carry over so it creates an error. Take out all the code tags and post just the text and it should work I think.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2012 8:48 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Tsar CUBE wrote:Helios, I managed to fill a post with a wall of text, I think the problem is that the colour tags or the normal tags from MGU don't carry over so it creates an error. Take out all the code tags and post just the text and it should work I think.
Already tried that. It's fine though. I hadn't updated my workspace in a while anyway.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2012 6:33 am
by PAZ
Pretty fresh here.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2012 7:08 am
by Helios Leinheart
You're in luck friend. I just finished part 1 of chapter 16. Because I'd rather not update my workspace with half a chapter, you can find it in the spoiler above. The workspace link will be added when it is complete.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2012 8:11 am
by PAZ
Gracias! Senor. I didn't expect to see it so soon.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 8:03 am
by Helios Leinheart
To anybody that gives this a read, I would really appreciate some intelligent and insightful comments that I can learn a lot from. I hate to say it, but I'm tired of getting the same old "Well, looks like so and so is about to..."

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 10:41 am
by Feathers
Understandable, sounds like you are looking to find out what you did right in at least other people's eyes? Or perhaps looking for ideas? Although something tells me you have a lot of ideas but are seeking more verification that you have executed all of your ideas correctly, mainly because you are seeking comments quite vigorously.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 11:08 am
by PAZ
Helios Leinheart wrote:To anybody that gives this a read, I would really appreciate some intelligent and insightful comments that I can learn a lot from. I hate to say it, but I'm tired of getting the same old "Well, looks like so and so is about to..."
Too bad, I am not a good critics guy.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2012 11:59 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Feathers wrote:Understandable, sounds like you are looking to find out what you did right in at least other people's eyes? Or perhaps looking for ideas? Although something tells me you have a lot of ideas but are seeking more verification that you have executed all of your ideas correctly, mainly because you are seeking comments quite vigorously.
It's not quite so complicated as that. The story receives plenty of comments on MGU, but 95% of them are always just a "good work" or "can't wait to see what happens next." Don't misunderstand. It's good to know that people are enjoying something that I made and I appreciate it. But I would also appreciate if people would be more specific about what they liked. Conversely, I also need to know what people didn't like.

Say I took those comments at face value and assumed that nothing was wrong with the story. I would then submit it to an online publishing site and they would probably laugh in my face.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2012 10:08 am
by Helios Leinheart
Updated with the finished version of chapter 16.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2012 3:32 pm
by PAZ
You express the sadness so well when Kazumi passed away that it even make my eyes wet for her. :(

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2012 11:43 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Now you know how I felt while writing it.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Thu Feb 09, 2012 8:08 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Chapter 17 has been posted. Enjoy.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 12:24 pm
by PAZ
Wait, did he just... I can't even... blast that thing into the sky with his ejaculate?

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Fri Feb 10, 2012 12:43 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Peacekeeper1894 wrote:Wait, did he just... I can't even... blast that thing into the sky with his ejaculate?
No silly. That would be way too badass.

He shot a laser out of his wee wee.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sat Feb 18, 2012 4:38 am
by Vendettadabeast
I can never forget about this fic no matter what site its on.

Re: Monster Isle

Posted: Sat Feb 18, 2012 12:50 pm
by Helios Leinheart
Vendettadabeast wrote:I can never forget about this fic no matter what site its on.
Yeah, it means a lot to me too. It was what awakened my love for writing. Can you believe that there was once a time when I never even considered writing like this, and was just content to sit around playing video games all the time?

I can't.