A Strange but Erotic New World

A man wondering around aimlessly finds an old shop, a cute girl and strange books.

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A Strange but Erotic New World

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So this is my first time letting people read a story of mine but I couldn't sleep and decided id try to see what I could do in 2 hours :^^;: so I hope you enjoy it and I will be making more chapters with a little more erotic bits in but this is to get the ball rolling, again hope you enjoy it. :^^v:


Chapter 1


Every Friday I go around town to go through the shops, browse around with no intention of actually buying anything. One Friday afternoon that all changed. There was an antique store that I had never seen before behind Fred’s Grocery market, it was very old looking and had a creepy aura around it. I had never noticed it before which was odd because of the wear on the outside of the building showed the weather damage and peeling paint. I walked across the street thinking “Oh what the hell you’ve got nothing better to do, might as well go take a look.” I got to the front of the building and could only barely see through the window covered in dust. “It doesn’t look like anybody has been in here for decades.” I thought to myself. Just as he was about to turn and walk away a face pops up where he was looking through the glass. Scared of the man with a long nose with green skin popping up out of nowhere I let out a yell and stumbled back and fell on my ass. The door opened slowly, and the man poked his head out of the door but the voice that came from the man shocked him.

“I’m so sorry! Are you okay?” It was a girl’s voice. Still in shock of what I was hearing I didn’t respond right away. I began to say, “Yeah I’m fi-“I stopped mid-sentence as the man’s face fall to the ground with a “splat” sound. Now it was my turn to sound like a girl with a loud scream “WAAAAAHHHH.” As I jumped back a few feet from the horror I had witnessed. “Oh no you really are hurt! I’m going to call an ambulance! Stay right there!” The person said with a caring but demanding voice. “Wait I’m okay really! I was just a little spooked is all! Please don’t call an ambulance” I yelled while getting up and running inside. But what I found was a girl no taller than five and a half feet and had beautiful white long hair that reached the middle of her back. She wore what looked like a black and red corset over a white long sleeved shirt that had a V in the neck to show a little bit of her rather full chest. Her skin tight black pants showed off her amazing features of her tight legs. Meeting her legs she had some shin high leather boots that had a little bit of dirt on the sides as if she had been out recently on a dirt road.

As she turned to look at me as I walked in, I saw the most perfect woman I had ever laid eyes on. She was absolutely stunning. I couldn’t find one imperfection and her eyes had the most stunning beauty but were intense enough to think she was staring straight into your soul. They were shining crimson that was so warm and caring it could melt the ice off of the ground. “Sir are you alright? I was so worried that I had hurt you. I did not mean to scare you, your gaze just happened to be where I was hanging up an old mask I had found in storage. I am so sorry for frightening you.” The girl said with tear filled eyes as if she was about to start crying. “Please don’t cry it really isn’t your fault. I get spooked to easily. It really is okay, I’m not hurt at all.” I said trying to console this mysterious beauty. I don’t think I have met you before, I’m Kelton.” “Ah, I’m so glad to find out that you are unharmed. You can call me Andria; it’s nice to meet you.” After an hour or two of talking with Andria I found that she is just moving into the neighborhood and that she isn’t from the area. “Ah yes I am from a place called the DR.” I tried to think of where that was but I had never heard of this place. “Must have been day dreaming when we were learning about that place in school.” Letting out a little laugh. “Well it’s already near closing so I will be locking up soon. But as a gift, I would like you to have these two books. I only offer these to you because you are my first customer... And my first friend” Andria said shyly with a bright blush turning her head to the right looking at the floor. In most situations I would have turned down her gifts but when I stare into those eyes it’s like I’m not in control anymore and I can’t resist what she asks of me. “Well thank you Andria! I will have to take you out to lunch in return one day.” I said hopeful with a big smile on my face. Andria jumped when she heard my words and slowly smiled still looking at the floor. Her face bright red she finally got a few words out, “I-I’d like that.” She said quietly before turning around and running to the back room.

With a cling of the bell above the entrance I left the building with a smile and decide to walk home. By the time I get home, its already 7 o’clock and dark, I get to the door to my apartment, unlock it and step inside. I switch on the light to see everything the way I left it. “I’m sure she wouldn’t want to go to lunch with me if she knew I lived in an apartment with only a bathroom and a living room with a small kitchen connected to it.” I thought to myself. “She was drop dead gorgeous too. “ My mind go to the two books that she gave me, I go and sit down on my couch that had a hide-a-bed inside it. The titles of the books were kind of strange. One was purple with a very detailed design on the cover of swirls and circles. The name of it was just one word. “Transport.” I put it down and look at the other she gave me. It had what looked like the same design except for this book was a deep red with the title “Identify and Transfer” I took a look inside and realized that all the pages were blank. “Huh that is odd. I wonder why she would give me a book with no writing in it.” I reached for the purple book again and an envelope fell out. “Make sure to be holding both books when reading the books title while looking through the pages of “Transport.” “That is really weird. Bet she is playing a joke on me.” I said with a grim look. I leave the books piled on top of the other under a lamp on the coffee table, pull out my bed from in the couch and fall asleep.

The dream that followed was very odd. It was a dream about Andria. But she was different. The corset she wore sprung forward and turned into what looked like wings, she had horns that extended up to the sky and a thin black tail. She kept telling me to read the books a d wonders will follow. I woke up in the middle of the night. Must have been around three or so, I picked up the books in an angry manner. “Fine you want me to read the damn books already fine I will.” I flip open the purple book to only see my reflection in the pages as if they were all mirrors. I looked down to make sure I had the right book and quietly said. “Transport.” For a moment nothing happened. Suddenly a purple glow began to come up from beneath me and the next thing you know I am being sucked down into the ground and spat out into a green field next to a forest. I landed on something hard but yet soft at the same time. I opened my eyes to look at the breasts of a rather muscular woman with long orange hair with black stripes going horizontally. It is only after slowly getting off of her and looking at her that her arms were covered in fur and as were her legs with the same pattern as her long thick hair. The woman had a blank expression on her face as she watched me get off of her, her expression soon changed to an expression of rage. “What in the hell do you think you are doing?! Get off of me this instant!” She yelled her demands as she smacked him nearly twenty feet away from her.

As I hit the ground I left a dust trail of my face grinding up against the dirt road. I turned around to see the woman coming at me, with her hands in fists. She stands only inches away from me as she raises her first up to come down and crash upon me. I was defenseless, her immense strength and power all I had for cover was the red book. I held it over my head as to act as a pathetic shield but when she hit the book it stopped her attack and began to glow red as it made a bright flash I suddenly felt powerful and strong. I looked at the woman who was awe struck, her face covered in utter confusion. And as I looked at my arms and legs I too was in confusion. I had become a beast like her.
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Re: A Strange but Erotic New World

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Okay...first thing to say: PARAGRAPHING OF DIALOGUE!!! ie.;

"person A speaks"

"person B speaks"

Narrative type stuff

As it is now, it is a wall of text that's a bit hard to read through. I can see you tried paragraphing and that's good. But each character's dialogue should be an individual paragraph by itself.

Also, tense. It seems to go from 1st person to 3rd person and back in places.

Otherwise, from what I can make of it, it looks promising.
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