Seeker of the Fae

[Helios Leinheart]

Didn't think I'd ever be doing this again. It's been about 5 or so years since I last put anything out. I started watching The Ancient Magus Bride and took a lot of inspiration from it. It feels good to be writing again.

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Seeker of the Fae is a story about a young man named Coda who doesn't feel like he belongs in this world. Eventually, a fairy from Elfyne senses a kindred spirit and sends a group of three to go to the human realm and guide him to where he belongs.
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Yeah, it's another "otherworld" story. I really have a thing for these. I'll be posting chapters on Deviantart from now on. As always, I appreciate input and critique.

https://heliosleinheart.deviantart.com/ ... -727731735

[Feathers]

Seeing everyone making it always about a "young man" almost makes me wanna write something about an "old man" (Think that Twilight Zone episode from the retirement home, I loved it) haha. Nice to see someone start off a story in the monster girl genre without talking about SEX SEX SEX that is plastered with dirty language! I don't read many, but when I do, that's what I always run into. X_X

On topic though, looks good and so far I have nothing negative to say and that's not common for me. xD Intro is a little confusing for me because of the way it starts, but that's probably just me. To be honest, your description here helped me understand the story path more than that entire chuck of text you had in Deviant Art.

Anyways, +1 from me.

[Raet]

Seeing everyone making it always about a "young man" almost makes me wanna write something about an "old man"

That is why in my stories the age range of the men is usually from mid twenties upwards I think it's wrong for them to only ever go for young men

[Helios Leinheart]

It's not really "that" kind of story. I don't do that anymore.

[Raet]

I read it and absolutely loved it! Your writing style has improved a lot from when you used to write in terms of how flowery and evocative it is now. Really nicely done!

[Helios Leinheart]

Thank you very much Raet. I appreciate it.

[Feathers]

Sure thing! Oh wait, my comments were not appreciated I think. I'll kiss up more next time. I'm waiting for the main dish. I really did like the prologue though.

[Helios Leinheart]

My apologies Feathers. You are a good boy.

[Helios Leinheart]

Here is chapter 1. I always find it difficult to write about things in reality. It's when I get to the otherworld that I can really start having fun.


https://heliosleinheart.deviantart.com/ ... 1518080411

[Blake81]

I always find it difficult to write about things in reality. It's when I get to the otherworld that I can really start having fun.

That's because reality ''constraints'' you; limits your creativity to ''What is'' without giving you the chance to explore the infinite potential that exists within the realm of fiction.

Btw, I read your prologue, and I must say I find it quite intriguing. Then again, knowing the anime that inspired you, I kind of take such a thing for granted. Can't wait to see how you will develop this one out.

My apologies Feathers. You are a good boy.

Somehow, I can easily picture Feathers doing that kind of expression

[Helios Leinheart]

That's because reality ''constraints'' you; limits your creativity to ''What is'' without giving you the chance to explore the infinite potential that exists within the realm of fiction.

That's remarkably concise and very accurate.

Thanks for reading bro. I neglected to mention, but I actually took up this project to help manage a bit of a depression issue I'm having right now. The Ancient Magus Bride helped a lot and I thought delving more into a world like that would be even better.

[Raet]

That was really touching and good, I have felt that way sometimes. My project I started on in 2012 has really stopped me from feeling like that, creating is really good.

I have some tips for you.

Instead of resemblance of peace the correct word would be semblance of peace, remembered back would sound better as thought back to.

the outward appearance or apparent form of something, especially when the reality is different.
"she tried to force her thoughts back into some semblance of order"

[Helios Leinheart]

That was really touching and good, I have felt that way sometimes. My project I started on in 2012 has really stopped me from feeling like that, creating is really good.

I have some tips for you.

Instead of resemblance of peace the correct word would be semblance of peace, remembered back would sound better as thought back to.

the outward appearance or apparent form of something, especially when the reality is different.
"she tried to force her thoughts back into some semblance of order"

I see. I'll make that change. Thanks.