Lamia

[Tsar CUBE]

Lamia Profile 1.jpg

Lamia Profile 2.jpg

So... I realise that my English may have holes in it, so if anyone sees any typos, spelling errors or grammar mistakes then please tell me!

Also, if you think something can be worded better then do mention it, as I am still new to this.

More of these to come, now that I finally perfected the borders... will probably even make a section just for them here in the custom profiles, so i can fit my whole world in there.

(Before anyone asks, I made everything in the above two images myself)

[JimmyRuss]

Although I do enjoy the idea of lamias in giant stretches of chocolate cake, I think you've mistaken 'desert' for 'dessert'.

[Tsar CUBE]

Although I do enjoy the idea of lamias in giant stretches of chocolate cake, I think you've mistaken 'desert' for 'dessert'.

Thanks for pointing it out, I was stupid to not check it

[Kurosawa]

Putting aside the thing about dessert and desert, the text is a bit...long. try to make some sentences a bit shorter and sum actions up some more.
I mean, this is supposed to be a general description of the lamia and not a detailed report on her behaviour or something, right ?
And besides that I think she is a bit....powerful. I mean, only the very strongwilled ones can break free of her gaze and singing and then they'll even end up cursed most of the time ? Feels like beeing human is more than just dangerous ^ ^'''

Anyway, besides the length and this feeling of....her beeing overpowered, you did a good job and I like the picture as well.

[Observer]

Well, let's just say it's a good try, the profile image is a plus. Except for the curses, although I think the Naga from Indian mythology can curse people with infertility, I've already seen lamias with the abilities you mentioned.

Also, you say they live on ringworlds? I'd like to see you expand on that. I always like a good setting.

[Feathers]

Are you working on your own universe now Tsar? This seems to be the makings of a book. I don't have much constructive things to say about the text, but she does seem really scary and powerful...I can see why you liked my quickslime. ^^;

One thing though, I love the book border. I can appreciate the work it took to make that look as good as it does. The texture on the paper almost looks wet, but it's nice that you didn't go for the "pee stained" book color.

[Tsar CUBE]

Putting aside the thing about dessert and desert, the text is a bit...long. try to make some sentences a bit shorter and sum actions up some more.
I mean, this is supposed to be a general description of the lamia and not a detailed report on her behaviour or something, right ?
And besides that I think she is a bit....powerful. I mean, only the very strongwilled ones can break free of her gaze and singing and then they'll even end up cursed most of the time ? Feels like beeing human is more than just dangerous ^ ^'''

Anyway, besides the length and this feeling of....her beeing overpowered, you did a good job and I like the picture as well.

Well the profile is supposed to be detailed

Her being overpowered can be blamed on original mythology to some degree... but yes they are meant to be on the higher end of the power scale.

Well, let's just say it's a good try, the profile image is a plus. Except for the curses, although I think the Naga from Indian mythology can curse people with infertility, I've already seen lamias with the abilities you mentioned.

Also, you say they live on ringworlds? I'd like to see you expand on that. I always like a good setting.

Thanks, I plan to expand on the ring worlds when I write the setting pages, just wanted to do the ten profiles first.

Are you working on your own universe now Tsar? This seems to be the makings of a book. I don't have much constructive things to say about the text, but she does seem really scary and powerful...I can see why you liked my quickslime. ^^;

One thing though, I love the book border. I can appreciate the work it took to make that look as good as it does. The texture on the paper almost looks wet, but it's nice that you didn't go for the "pee stained" book color.

Yeah, all the pictures after the Lamia that I drew where meant for that universe of mine... just took so damn long to draw ten

I plan to make a book with ten profiles and a setting info :3

For the paper texture, I was trying to go for a more "white marble" look to fit with the border. Yellow paper look wouldn't really fit the more futuristic setting.

I was supposed to publish the Dark Elf last night but GW 2 got the better of me, might publish her today/tomorrow...

[Kmon13]

Can't wait to see it Tsar ...

But one question

Will you be doing bio of a Valkyrie /Dark Valkyrie in the future I really liked what you done with the Lamina...

[Feathers]

Ahh marble look, I completely overlooked that. Apologies for my ignorance. That's a unique idea and fits well. I dislike "yellow" paper as I said, so it is a nice step up in my opinion.

[Tsar CUBE]

Can't wait to see it Tsar ...

But one question

Will you be doing bio of a Valkyrie /Dark Valkyrie in the future I really liked what you done with the Lamina...

As I have drawn the Valkyrie already, YES, I will be making her profile, however she will be the tenth profile I make as I drew her last

Dark Valkyrie hasn't been drawn yet so she will come out in a different booklet :3

Ahh marble look, I completely overlooked that. Apologies for my ignorance. That's a unique idea and fits well. I dislike "yellow" paper as I said, so it is a nice step up in my opinion.

Well, thinking back on it, I guess making a marble texture for book pages might not have been the best idea, as books aren't often associated with marble

I'm not a fan of yellow pages in books either.

I keep delaying my Dark Elf release as last night I ended up going to a manga cafe (yeah manga cafe in NZ, crazy right O_o), and ordering Omurice with mushrooms, here is what it looked like (I feel like a real otaku now):

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[Tsar CUBE]

Updated the profile, changed "dessert" to "desert", changed font of profile name a bit and added precognition powers (something I forgot to add last time... nothing like making something op even more op)...

[Kmon13]

Can't wait to see it Tsar ...

But one question

Will you be doing bio of a Valkyrie /Dark Valkyrie in the future I really liked what you done with the Lamina...

As I have drawn the Valkyrie already, YES, I will be making her profile, however she will be the tenth profile I make as I drew her last

Dark Valkyrie hasn't been drawn yet so she will come out in a different booklet

Don't worry I'm patient about it.

I loved what you did with the Valkyrie so if making the Lewd and dark version of the noble warrior maiden of the slain will take time....

I'm all for it Tsar!

[Tsar CUBE]

Lewd and Dark in my setting usually means she will put you on a chain and make you her slave.... so be careful what you wish for!

[Vendettadabeast]

This is,awesome,Tsar,whaty a wonderful job you did,I look forward to seeing more profiles from you.

Also like Kmon, I love lewd and dark girls too,so bring your best/worst, i doubt i be intimidated.

[SIERRA-116]

Well, I like her, though the nature of their revenge is a bit... not nice. Still, if I wasn't confined to living a primitive life, I'd be happy.